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Ivy Rivera, eighteen years old was known to be the girl from the wrong side of the river. Everyone in Winslow, Arizona, a small town where she grew up looked down on her and she was labeled a jinx. Ivy Rivera life changed after spending a whole night with a stranger who showed her love and attention she had never received even from her parents. Soon Ivy found out that she was pregnant, and to avoid being mocked by people, she left the small town to start a new life in Los Angeles. Ivy Rivera locked up her past life to focus on her career as a photographer. Her top priority was to give her child the life he deserved and the love she never received as a child from her parents. One day, Ivy found the the stranger she had a night with ten years ago. Feelings would stir up but would Ivy be willing to let the stranger near her son? Would she set things aside and let love overpower the doubt and fear she has been keeping for years? An eye-opening love story and family drama.

DARK ROMANCE: A reckless dare reunites her with a handsome, daunting man, forging a love of discipline and passion. *** SHE WAS POWERLESS AGAINST HIS ULTIMATUM BECAUSE SHE WAS STUCK BETWEEN THE DEVIL AND THE DEEP BLUE SEA-BETWEEN HIM AND THE LAST DARE GAME WHICH HE KNEW NOTHING ABOUT SHE PLAYED IT BECAUSE OF HER RECKLESS BEHAVIOUR- HER FIRE OF REBELLION HE IS DETERMINED TO EXTINGUISH THAT FIRE AFTER HER CARELESS MOVE ON HIM TO QUENCH A FIRE, YOU HAD TO BE SOMEWHAT CLOSE, HENCE HIS DECISION TO MARRY HER- AND HE WASN'T ASKING "You have until the end of today to give me a positive response or I will get you to marry me in the Mafia way." She gasped and her eyes were like saucers. "Mafia?" "I told you that you never really knew me. I was on my own when you came looking for trouble. Tonight, Elizabeth." SYNOPSIS: A dark game forces Zee, a reckless young woman into contacting the guy who took her virginity and begging him to marry her, but she neither expected his acceptance which keeps her in the game, nor his Mafia life as well as the tough love she is forced to receive at his hands.

André D'Amore: I've known my whole life who I am. I'm a hybrid, Alpha heir, and too fabulous to be straight. I've lost count of how many times I've had to fight to defend my . Yet, I never expected to have to defend it from my mate. Not my problem that he's spent his life unaware he was in a closet. He needs to get his act together. Because my papa is naming me Alpha of the pack, we just defeated. And I want my mate at my side. Darren Delaney: I always thought I knew myself. That I knew my wolf, I've always been a soldier, a warrior, and I'm straight. One assignment has me questioning everything. I thought finding my mate would be the happiest day of my life. Instead, it's the most confusing. My mate is the hybrid SON of the Incubi Alpha?! The Goddess got her wires crossed with this pairing. Now I'm questioning my as he's drawing me in like a moth to a flame. This is a sequel to Alpha of Nightmares. Events in this book overlap with events in Alpha of Nightmares. This book can be read as a standalone, though it is encouraged to read Alpha of Nightmares. The Incubi Pack Series: Book 1 - Alpha of Nightmares Book 2 - The Hybrid Alpha Book 3 - Dream Mate Anthology Short Story - Chosen Mate Anthology Bonus Story - Sicilian Holiday Anthology Short Story - The Quiet Giant's Mate Book 4 - Beta's Innocent Mate

Garren Ryuu, the God of dragons, has waited over five hundred years for his mate. An equal on all fronts. But when he comes face to face with his mate at long last, he is forced to make a decision. Turn his back on his people and their traditions for his heart or break it and accept the life of a mad king. It's a dark and dangerous path that only the strong survive. So will fate be on his side or is she just another cruel obstacle set to take him down?

"Please!! Leave me, it's not right, you are my sister's husband!! It's wrong!! ", Anjali begged in front of Alex. Alex chuckled and grabbed her jaws tightly, " I don't care , from now you are my mistress , your only work is to serve your master. Now strip or you want me to do that honor for you ", He ordered woth cold expression. When Anjali heard that words from her mouth her blood boiled due to anger , she pushed him with her full strength and with full force she slapped him so hard, " Until now, I was silent just for the sake that you are my brother in law but today you have crossed your every limit. Now I will tell about you to everyone!! Just wait and watch ", Anjali said with disgust and spit on the floor while glaring Alex. Alex clenched his fist tight and fisted her hairs tightly, " I am not afraid of anything b, do whatever you want because in last you will be under me screaming my name, so it's better for saving your energy for bed ", he gritted out. " Ahhh.... I will tell Nina and dad about your disgusting acts ", Anjali glared him furiously. Alex smiled sarcastically and asked, " What will you tell them, that you fucked your brother in law on your eighteenth birthday by the way it's your family that gifted you as a gift on your eighteenth birthday and now they sold you to me " . Anjali slapped his hand and said, " Don't lie!! I know my family can't do anything like that . How could you stoop so low just for your lust." " Ok then ask your family, they will told you truth ", Alex said with bored expression and leave her hair. Without wasting any time Anjali ran out of his mention

Women wish to have a husband like Nikaulas King. Clearly, the man was madly in love with his wife for only a person who is madly in love would wed a crippled woman.But was it the truth?Angela Hernandez and Nikaulas King were married for two years. Angela loved him with all her heart but he was in love with someone else, Leah, his best friend's wife.Despite that, she hoped that one day he would take a look at her. One day he will take her name while being inside her and that one day he will reciprocate her love but what she ever got in return was heartbreak and his ignorance because, one she was crippled and second, his heart was already taken.But what would happen when one day she would reject his touch and demand for divorce?This is the story of his broken angel.The story of rejection and obsession

Athena Moonville is the daughter of the Alpha and Luna of the Moon Stone Pack. She may not be able to shift as yet but her life is still perfect. She has perfect grades and the perfect boyfriend. Everything seems to be on track until she catches her boyfriend Nate sleeping with her best friend Lia. Heartbroken and angry she runs out into the rain, cursing herself for not seeing the signs of betrayal sooner. That's when she witnesses her parents getting killed by rogues. Before they take their last breaths, her parents tell her not to trust anyone, not even the werewolves from her pack. Now angry and alone, Athena sets off into the woods. She travels for hours until she comes upon a cottage deep in the forest, but before she can enter she collapses from hunger and dehydration.  ********** Alpha Xavier Pureblood is the leader of the Midnight Pack. He is arrogant and hard-headed but very protective. When the elders tell him that the pack needs a Luna to make their pack stronger, he gets angry, since these same elders told him to reject his fated mate years ago because she wasn't from an alpha bloodline.  Frustrated and with his wolf, Exodus at the surface he transforms and runs to Scarlet, his ex-mate's cottage. There he stumbles across a girl passed out on the forest floor. He scoops her up and immediately feels a connection. He finds it weird she doesn't have a scent but his wolf doesn't care, he vows to protect this mysterious beauty at all costs, not knowing she is the wolf from his favourite story as a child, The Legend Of The Arctic Wolf. 

UNDER HEAVY EDITING ***** "Three," he began counting "Don't you fucking touch me with those damn stinking claws, alright? I detest you so much that if I had a silver, I'd stick it right through you..." "Two" his eyes were blazing "... And I don't give a slimy fuck if you're an Alpha or not if you can just walk into a club and buy some..." "One..."  ************* Iris, a seventeen-year-old wolfless Hybrid, escapes from her abusive Pack after she's haunted down and almost killed by the Luna because her Son rejected his destined mate to be with her. Years Later, after she finds herself in the Deadly blood Canine run by three Alphas, Iris discovers that her suffering is far from over when she is won in a bet by Alpha Aidan. There are many wrong reasons within three ruthless Alphas: Aidan, Atlas, and Tristan, whose primary goal is to possess or destroy. All fun and games until she's Mated with them. To the same men who would rather kill her for owning a vampire gene. Amid the betrayals, power struggle, possession, and secrets, Iris has to decipher who she is, to protect the pack from imminent destruction. Will she? Or does she get destroyed first?

Five years ago, Lin Hao was framed up and kicked out of his family for his true love, reduced to a powerless man who had been hunted down by his brother since then. However, he grasped a slim chance of survival and returned to power: being rescued by a master on the verge of death and learning Traditional Medicine from him.Five years later, he defeated all Gods of War in eight counties, earning the reputation of Holy Invincible God of War. In the meantime, he was also the renowned Medical Sage who could cure dying patients and whom everyone worshiped.To treat his seriously ill daughter, Lin Hao came back to his motherland, where he had to be wary of family members who always plotted against him and enemies from foreign countries who hadn’t stopped persecuting him at the same time. So let’s join this journey with Lin Hao to slay enemies, protect his love, and tide over all crises.

After a one night stand, I opened my eyes and found a naked handsome man lying next to me. He was the last Lycan. According to the rumors, the last Lycan went crazy every full moon. He could only be tamed by having sex with a virgin werewolf. Every pack sent virgins to sacrifice to the last Lycan, and I was the chosen one. Before he woke up, I escaped quietly. But it's strange how my wolf became more powerful! Could sex with a Lycan make me stronger?! --- The Lycan was a wall of masculine muscle behind me. His body heat scorched me even through my wedding dress; his breath seared the shell of my ear as he leaned closer and whispered, "Mate..." If the last Lycan was the Devil, I thought I might want to go to hell. --- When I rescued the last Lycan from his cage, I never thought that one day, I would be put into a cage by him.