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Her hair is a lustrous blond. Her eyes are flashing blue-violet. She is sweet and childlike. They call her Angelina. Though it doesn't feel right. How can she tell them that underneath her innocent personality she feels something more? Something wild. Something dangerous. Something she had been before. But she doesn't understand. ____ He knows she has secrets. Underneath her timid personality. She is something more. She is someone he will be willing to explore. Something he is willing to expose. He calls her Angel. His Angelina.

My dad urgently requested that I bring Jeffrey back as he was rushed to the emergency room following a car accident. I nodded, holding back tears, but deep down, I knew Jeffrey harbored resentment toward me. He blamed me for his shattered relationship, my inherited wealth, and for coming between him and his first love. Nothing could deter him from pursuing her, not even me. "Evalyn, today is Melinda's birthday. Can you just be reasonable for once?" He spoke these words amidst the familiar sounds of laughter before abruptly ending the call. Moments later, my dad took his last breath, his eyes wide open in a final, stark gaze. As I fulfilled his last requests, organizing everything as he had instructed, I decided to let Jeffrey go. It was only then that he began to regret everything…

Your son’s life is on the line. The only way to save him? His biological brother’s blood. But when you track down the real father, you uncover a shocking twist: the clinic swapped the sperm—yours came from the wrong vault. And the donor? Your boss. 😳

Crish is a billionaire, he's the CEO of a big company. However, he has scandals in his past. Three years ago, Crish left Camellia–his girlfriend, while she was pregnant, because Crish chose to marry a conglomerate woman named Olivia to get a lot of wealth. After Camellia disappeared for a long time, unexpectedly, Camellia came back to Crish's life to take revenge. She prepared many plans to destroy Crish's life, one way of revenge is to have an affair with Crish's father. Camellia will tell Olivia about Crish's scandal, because if Olivia finds out about it, all of Crish's wealth will also be lost, because most of Crish's wealth belongs to his wife. Then what will happen? Will Camellia succeed in getting her revenge? Will all Crish's scandals be exposed?

There is a thin line between love and hatred. Charlotte Jenkins a lady in her mid twenties has to get married to the only heir of Dalton group of company. She thought she would get her old life back and get to save her dying sister but will Tyler Dalton be the ideal husband she thought he was? Find outbid this intriguing story of how Charlotte Jenkins finds out how cubby, manipulative and wayward Tyler Dalton is and how they slowly fall in love with each other.

Anna, a well-known assassin, was reborn into the knight family outcast after a near-death experience. Anna, who was given a new chance at life, had promised to live on as her and help her avenge her death. She seeks revenge against those who wronged her with the help of Benjamin, her fiancé before her rebirth and CEO of Oscar Groups. Would she be able to achieve her goals as secrets unrevealed and discover the entangled relationship she shared with Sonia, whose body she was inhabiting? Extract from the story Anna sat at the spa as she underwent a transformation process. The previous occupant had her hair dyed pink, which she found odd and weird. After her makeover session, she stared at her reflection in the mirror, the corner of her mouth quivering into a devilish grin. “ANNA IS DEAD AND I WILL LIVE ON AS SONIA.” she said to herself as she had only one thought in mind, ‘REVENGE.’

The royal house of Medora sets up an international contest. The winner gets to marry the crown prince and one day rule as his queen. But with the entire world watching, and several other women trying to sabotage you, falling in love isn't easy. Jane didn't take the contest seriously at first. She never even thought she would get in. She is introduced into a new world filled with ballgowns, secret romances and of course: Prince Sebastian. Can she fall in love with someone so different than her? Or will the dark side of this new golden world get to her first?

Sarah Parker is a young she wolf apart of a world, that's supposed to make dreams come true. But what people read in Once upon a time stories, isn't the reality she's living through! Cursed by the moon goddess when she meets her fated mate. Setting the curse into motion, Sarah is destined to a fate worse then death. Will her mate be able to save her from the curse set upon his kind thousands of years ago and keep the darkness at bay? Or will the shadows call sealing both their fates....

This is the sequel to "TAKE A CHANCE ON ME". Is the love Belle & Shawn found going to survive? And what about Billy? Is his good deed of bringing Belle and Shawn together going to get unnoticed? Let's see what destiny have in store for all of them... and more. Only once in your life, you find someone who can completely turn your world around. You open your heart knowing that there's a chance it may be broken one day and in opening your heart, you experience a love and joy that you never dreamed possible. You find that being vulnerable is the only way to allow your heart to feel true pleasure that's so real it scares you. Life seems completely different, exciting, and worthwhile. Your only hope and security is in knowing that they are a part of your life.

A growl escaped his throat as my robe fell and pooled at my feet. I was completely naked. I saw his eyes dilating. He wanted me. That was all that mattered. A seductive smile curled on my lips, hiding the nervousness I felt. "I'm all yours, Alpha..." "Get dressed! And get out!" His breathing hitched as his gaze swept all over my naked form. I walked towards him, biting my lower lip as I reached for his shirt, unbuttoning it while ignoring his anger. He would have pushed me away if he didn't want this, but instead, he moved swiftly and pinned me against the wall. "Is this what you want?" His said hoarsely. His breath brushed against my neck, sending pleasurable tingles between my thighs as he pressed his front against mine. I stared back at him, letting my eyes show the emotions I had kept hidden all these years. "I want you, Caspian." ***** In a world where Alpha Females are pawns for the Claiming, being an Omega Female is considered a blessing. Andrea was born and raised as an Omega. She had the freedom to choose whether to be claimed by her mate or be someone's chosen. And so she thought, until the reality of her past came hunting her.  Alpha Caspian knew from the very beginning that he wanted Andrea, whether they were fated mates or not. But by the time he was ready to make amends for sending her away when she was 15, a secret from her past had resurfaced.  Would he let her go this time? Or was she worth fighting for? ***** A spin-off novel from the Black Shadow Pack Series. While the story is stand-alone, I recommend that you read the Black Shadow Pack Series to gain a better understanding of the characters.