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After her parents divorce, Kaya Reneé Joston moves to the small town of Torent. Spending her final year at Rodney high, all she wants to do is cruise through the year unknown, whilst keeping a large distance away from her father and his new step family. She believes she may survive this year as she already has a friend, but of course that takes a turn for the worst when she meets Azian, a boy with changing eye colors who seems way too beautiful to be human and keeps running into a clear eyed phone thief who calls her his Esteraiï.All she wants to do is survive this awful year away from her mother but how can she when gorgeous blue eyed Azian haunts her very realistic dreams, with his alluring golden eyes, a step sister who has everything she's ever dreamed of and an annoying thief who keeps finding a way into her closed heart.One things for sure, there is something mysterious happening in Torent. A mystery only she can uncover.

Eve finds herself in a stranger's bed and she does the first thing that comes to her mind; run. This stranger appears later on to give her the formal offer to be his girlfriend with benefits. But what kind of benefits are they? And does she agree? What does the future hold for her and this stranger? Find out.

Benjamin Shields is the third born son to the Alpha of his pack, he was never expected to step up and be alpha to his pack... but one day he walks into the office of most ruthless and feared alpha in the region... just to learn he is her mate! But is this truly the beginning of their story... or the middle?

(Completed) A vampire with memory loss. A fae with vampire issues. What happens when fate merges their path? -----———————— Willow, a fae, an assassin, and also known as 'whisperer' by a selected few, is ordered to spy on the vampire king by her Guild head. But before she can venture on her task, she stumbles on a vampire in need of dire help. Lothaire, a two-thousand-year-old vampire, also known as the most powerful vampire by a selected few, has only known the life of a prisoner since he woke up in a cage some years ago. But before he can escape his reality he was tied and left to die. What happens when these two meet? Can Willow help him before Lothaire's captors re-capture him to finish the job? Will Willow help him when she learns his identity? Who are those captors? Why do they want to kill Lothaire? Can they find out before it's too late?

In the dystopian future, singularity is within sight, over half of the population is obsessed with a brand new psychoactive substance, and transhumans outnumber humans. Kaiser Vrix is a private eye employed to search out a computer jock with plans of taking down the whole government with one virus. With the assistance of his machine intelligence, will Kaiser stop the Hacker referred to as Thinker?

Nobody wish to witness the death of their love one especially if the person is your parents. Elena marshano is a beautiful girl who always wish to have a peaceful and happy life, all that changed after she witnessed the murder of her parents, that experience changed her life but not in a good way. She became ruthless and heartless above all she became the Queen of mafia. She vow to take her revenge on the person that murder her parents.

" I only need your body and your embryo. No, Just pretend that you are my human incubator " Giselle Hidalgo, A beautiful seductive exotic dancer. Dancing to the beat of the heat that made everyone suffocated by her seductive charm. She is content in her life, She has a plan for herself but everything will turn to Chaos when she meets Xander Mondeverde, A hot tempered billionaire who is allergic to women. Giving her an unexpected proposal. She will have anything she likes, money and luxuries but the catch is she needs to carry his baby without falling in love with him. 

As the daughter to a prestigious family, she was trained as the heir of her father’s legacy. Usually, this type of training was well-suited for the boys of the family but since she’s the only child and she is a girl, her father allowed her to train. Due to her training, she had no friends and she was casted as an outsider. At a young age, she was expected to train both physically and mentally. She was both good in archery and swordsmanship as well as in her studies as she had an affinity with Japanese history. Years passed and her training was paying off. She was prepared to inherit the company when her parents announced that they will be having another child. Much to her dismay, her baby brother was born. She was stripped of everything she had prepared her whole life for. After an unfortunate car accident, she found herself in a different timeline. Will she be able to return to her own time?

“Who is this angel?” This was Sébastien Olivier de Monfort’s question the moment he saw Cassandra Applegate. She seemed so young, so innocent and so damn beautiful… He knew he had to have the gorgeous Cassandra at all costs. Sébastien discovers she is a young widow, and that her marriage has left her feeling ugly, broken, unwanted, and very doubtful around men. So, the moment they met in person, he took it upon himself to teach her all he needed her to know about sex, pleasure, passion… and love. In a short period, Sébastien teaches Cassandra so many things about life, about love, about herself… Right in front of her stunned eyes, he opens the gates of a new world where everything is possible, even falling in love and getting married in Paris to a devastatingly handsome French tycoon.

In the time before time, they were the rulers: Crimson wolves, a lineage of unparalleled power and dominance over Lunaria. With their unparalleled strength, fiery eyes and blood-red fur, they were stuff of legends, the pinnacle of what is meant to be Alpha. But as centuries passed, the tides of power are ever-shifting, the balance of the lands fractured and so did the Game of Alphas begin.   Pyra Blackwood, a scorned omega was seduced, betrayed and cast out by the same Alpha who rejected her. Left for dead, her life takes a whole turn as she is thrust into a deadly game of power where loyalty is an illusion, and survival demands sacrifice. She uncovers a hidden power—one that could reshape the fractured balance of the land.  Pregnant with the offsprings of her betrayer, Pyra must protect her heir, forge unlikely alliances and rise as the first Queen of Alphas.  Will she master the very game created to destroy her? Or will she fall prey to the dark forces seeking to consume her?  In the Game of Alphas, the rules are simple: trust no one, show no weakness, and never forget—Power is everything.