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“That’s the thing, Perez, I am itchy as fuck for a pussy but not Vivian’s.” “Then whose?” “Ava,” I confessed, “I want to bury my dick in that pussy of hers. I want to fuck the hell out of her and drill a hole inside of her. I want to have her in ways that Nando has never had her. I want to make sure I take what he treasures and destroy it.” “Then do it. Fuck her. She's your plaything, after all.” ***** Like every girl in love, Avaline Richard's dream is to marry the man of her dream, Fernando. But on the day that her dreams are supposed to come through, her life gets thrown under a bus. Her groom is killed on their wedding day, and she is kidnapped by the most ruthless Mafia in Naples, Miguel Castell, for a crime Nando committed years ago. Now Ava's only dream is to escape the clutches of the handsome and sexy, yet dangerous Mafia Lord. But Ava's dreams have developed a habit of turning against her... In this captivating tale of love, hate, betrayal, and blood, follow Ava and Miguel as they weave through the ropes of an impossible world in a world where power means Blood and Guns.

Sebuah kota kecil yang bernama kota fleth hiduplah sebuah anak dari dunia lain yang bertransmigrasi ke dunia renaissance yang penuh dengan ilmu supranatural, mistik sekaligus spiritual yang mengandung banyak sekali misteri sejarah di dalamnya.

God forbid black and grey-furred werewolves walked amongst the others. As royals, the King and Queen had fur white as snow. The noblemen, their fur was either silver or gold. The commoner’s fur was red or brown. Then there was me, Deonna, fur as black as coal.Marlon Roessler was the most honored nobleman, master of the Roessler family, and the only one capable of competing with the King himself. He spent his life thinking that dark-furred wolves were uncleansed, uneducated, bottomless creatures. I was a dirtball wolf slave, and I was meant to be repulsed by him. Yet his wolf wouldn’t let him be disgusted; his wolf wanted me, as his MATE.God must want to kill me faster to make me his mate, especially we have sex after a drug accident. But after As the weeks went on, it seemed as though my relationship with Marlon has only grown more intense. He came into my room only to have sex again and agian.A dirty black sex slave. That is what I am.Until he said, he was mesmerized by me.

SYNOPSIS She came to drop some files at my penthouse, I was drunk to stupor, I wasn't thinking straight and we had a one night stand. He's Collins Walter, a cold-hearted Billionaire, popular around the world. A business freak, who doesn't seem to care about love and marriage, talks less of babies. She's Piper Walker, a kind-hearted young lady, in search of a job, but got one at Walter Empire. She's an accountant working for the whole Walter Empire, But what happened when she had a one night stand with her boss in an unimaginable situation, that led to pregnancy. Extracted From The Novel I tried my possible best to get him of me, but it seems impossible, he threw me on his bed angrily and climb over. "Please Sir"I cried out. He ignore my pleads and torn my new shirt in a hungry way which send some cold shiver down my spine. "My virginity, My virginity"I kept murmuring below my breath not until I saw what I fear the most, his 8cm d!ck bounce out of his shorts. "Mom, save me"I cried, as tears streamed down my cheeks How did you think this happen ? Will he accepted the pregnancy ? Could there still be more to his cold attitude ? DON'T MISS THIS OUT !!

As the adopted kid at home, I’m ignored by my parents and verbally abused by my sister. I didn‘t expect I will see a stunning Alpha Billionaire standing in front of my door, with luxury gifts in his hands."So ... you’re Mr. Wilson's lost child." "No … Wait…what? What … what do you mean?” My mind spun. "I’m your fiancé," he said with an attractive smile.It has to be a joke. Expensive gifts, a billionaire father, and a hot fiancé….How am I supposed to process everything？！

Fiona finds her husband cheating on her for yrs with his secretary. Heartbroken, she's wasted alone in bar. Her husband keeps calling her. His billionaire boss:"Pick it up. Let him hear your moan. Tell him he's fired and you're mine..."

How does it feel, then, to be kissed by an unlovable brute?——I find it amusing that I didn't even have to track down my runaway bride. She simply climbed into my car, completely oblivious to the fact that I am the man she was running away from. I could catch her. Hunting women down is the last thing I want to be doing, truly. I mean Ruby no harm, even though she unknowingly said some awful, untrue things about me in the car. In time, she’ll learn that those things aren’t true. I’m not like my parents. Still, I have no choice but to marry this girl. She’s barely eighteen, three years younger than me, but it’s fate. All of this mess started about a month ago.

"So you only need a child from me?" My voice was impressively strong despite the pain I felt within. "No, Ella. I only need you to pretend to be my Luna, till my lover wakes up." "If I accept to do this, what do I stand to gain?" "You will be treated with utmost respect as the Luna and you will have access to everything you want," Ryker said and my already shattered heart froze. "This contract will be terminated immediately upon pregnancy and no money would be paid to you." ****** Ella Rose is an orphan who is constantly being maltreated by her stepmother and step sister. Everyone in the village considers her a plague and badluck. Without a mate and a good job, Ella becomes an object of ridicule. But everything changes when she runs into rogues in the forest. In an attempt to save herself, fate sends her falling into the hands of her mate. Things finally seem to turn around for the better when the mate in question turns out to be the feared and ruthless Alpha Ryker of the Black Fur Pack. He buys her from her wicked step family and Ella is floating with excitement until he tells her everything was a sham and he only got her to be his contract bride in a condition that she never gets pregnant. This seems like a simple rule despite the pain in her heart. She accepts to be is pretend Luna but what happens when she breaks the very clause she was supposed to keep? In this tale of romance and heartache, follow Ella as she surfs through a complicated life with a mate who already loves another and a pregnancy he is not supposed to know about...

Elara is a single mom who struggles to survive in the cruel werewolf world. Yet, a twist of fate connects her destiny to Alpha Alaric. Alpha Alaric Donovan, the head Alpha, is a charming business tycoon. When She finds out her daughter was switched at birth with Alpha Alaric's kid 6yrs ago. He takes her to his mansion and throws a document at her to sign. Her: No, I won't leave my child... wait, a marriage contract??

She writhing on the sand, her plump, pale body shining in the moonlight, that same intoxicating strawberry milk scent wafting off her in waves. “Please,” she whimpers. She arches her back, her coat sliding down enough to expose her ripe, perfect breasts as she bats her eyelashes up at him. “Please help me.” It’s at that moment that the moonlight shines down on her face just right and Landry feels like his knees are giving out on him.The light glints off her big eyes, so familiar Why this Omega in heat look exactly like the female Alpha he’s fought beside so many times? As the only female alpha, she is strong and brave, and fights alongside alpha King Landry, achieving victory after victory. But one day, she went into heat in front of him ...... When he learns the secret of her disguise as an alpha, will he fulfill his duty to torture her severely? Or will he personally help her ease the pain of her heat?