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The day my father dies, my boyfriend, Heath Summers, is accompanying his true love for her prenatal checkup. I lose hope in him and ask for a breakup, but he thinks I'm just being jealous. He says, "Naomi's already miscarried thrice—it hasn't been easy for her to conceive this child. Stop being unreasonable." I've been with him for seven years, but it turns out I can't compare to his childhood sweetheart.

A teenager Daniel, life comes falling apart. Everything changes when he meets a mystery girl, a princess. She accidentally leads him to a book with powers that make your wishes come true but Daniel doesn’t understand the price. Now everything he has is at stake including his life. Daniel, an intelligent but shy boy loses his crush to his best friend. His parents are on the verge of a divorce and not even his friend Glenn can help. When fate leads him to a strange pretty girl, he discovers a book that grants wishes but everything changes when competition arises for the book. The mystery Princess, who becomes his good friend and her evil Uncle both want the book. With awareness of the situation, He is forced to lie to all his friends and love ones. With all his ties at risk, what does Daniel do when he finds out the cost of his wishes coming true is his life.

Stella sacrificed her body for Adrian, only to discover she was nothing more than a replacement for her sister, Clara. Adrian deeply loves Clara and sees Stella as nothing but a gold digger. Heartbroken and betrayed, she decides to leave and start a new life. But when she walks away, Adrian desperately tries to get her back, offering money in exchange for her love. Just as he thinks he can take her back, Stella’s five mafia brothers appear. They glare at Adrian, sneering, “She’s our mafia princess. You’re not fit to have her.”

On the day of Charles Green’s birthday party, he put a diamond ring on Lilu Ximmer’s finger. Lilu stared at the ring and felt flattered. “Charles, are you really going to divorce her and marry me?” Charles raised an eyebrow in amusement. “I’m single.” We had been married for three years, but Charles, my husband, never once acknowledged me as his wife. It was because I caused his sister’s death. If I had not held Charles back and refused to let him go, perhaps his sister could have been saved. That was why I was the reason for his sister’s death. I always thought that he hated me, until one day…

Mae is the secret wife of Alpha Werewolf President Aaron. As an Omega, she has always been nothing more than useless in his eyes. But when her sister, who disappeared eight years ago, suddenly returns, Mae finally decides to break free from Aaron's cage. Yet, he hunts her down, determined to control her. This arrogant, cold-hearted man has never understood what it means to win someone back. He refuses to admit he loves her—only to slowly learn the painful lesson of what it means to lose the one thing he always took for granted...

Three years ago, she was a poor judge of character. She was willing to donate her kidney and become disfigured for an a**hole. However, not only did that man cheat on her, he had even nearly caused her to lose her life!Three years later, she regained her beauty. Upon her glorious return, she swore to make all a**holes pay for what they did.It was widely known that Stanley Batton, the wealthiest tycoon in Atlantis, was a cruel man feared by many. Although he had the facial features of a passionate man, he was known for his heart of ice.People constantly speculated on the kind of woman who would be able to open his heart.However, to everyone’s surprise, he kneeled on one knee under the spotlight, and in front of every known media company, to tie a butterfly knot on her shoe.“Stanley Batton, what do you really want?” She seemed panicked and flustered.He laughed at himself. “Xyla Quest, no one else but you can take my life away!”

"You are mine in this life! Don't you dare to run away from me again!" He said while hugging her tightly. He won't ever let her go even if he had to cage her. However, will she stay obedient to him? Lilian Wilson, a wealthy heiress, was sold to the Mafia king, Evano Lonardo. They started on the wrong foot but as they faced many difficulties, their love bloomed and they became obsessed with each other. What would happen when life throws them serious problems? Will Lilian know about their past connection? What made her forget their encounter? When the danger was lurking in the darkness of the city of crime, a dangerous love story would bloom from love and hatred…Their cute kids would be the icing on the cake!

He rose from abjection and achieved eternity in glory.He embraced the prettiest beauties and killed the strongest opponents. He was able to shift the clouds into rain and cover the sky with one hand.He could overrun the entire world and go anywhere as he pleased.He pacified wars and held the world in awe.He was matchless in the world.However, his hair turned white overnight for his beloved woman and he was on the verge of death.He was surrounded by enemies who were trying to take his life.He struggled his way to become mighty and fought for everything he cherished.For this age, he was the only king of the Dark World.His name was a byword for might.As a man living in the world, his only ideal was to pursue brilliance.

What will you do if you somehow were able to travel between two world?. Harem? Wealth? Power? Adventure?... Sai Mies was able to travel between two worlds Earth and Fantasma, With that ability he swore to changed his mundane life to the better. Each steps he take will bring him closer to his aim, to become the most wealthiest and powerful man in both worldsP/s The image wasn't mine, i wil take it down if asked to. :) tq. also i was invited by the GoodNovel Team to post my works here, so i guess why not. I'm not an english speaker, jusy a heads up.

Octavia was the pack omega, abused and beaten by the pack members all her life. Octavia's mate Dylan rejected her and took her best friend Samantha as his mate, he also made her luna and got her pregnant. Octavia left the pack and went rogue when she couldn't take it any more. Silver, Alpha of Blood Lake pack, he is powerful and has the biggest pack. He has always been looking for his mate, he has always wanted to feel the bond and love from a mate. He came across Octavia as a rogue and found out that she is his mate. He accepted her even with how she didn't have a wolf. Silver love Octavia with all of his heart and is ready to do anything for her But there are always enemies lurking in the shadow ready to take down the powerful Alpha. But Octavia just had to be the prophecy everyone had long forgotten. But is it every one?