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Aria’s just an ordinary housewife, an orphan-turned-Luna. On she and her alpha king husband's anniversary, The alpha king auctioned off her favorite necklace at a high price... She's excited waiting for him to come but only to see him putting it on another woman. Turns out this wasn't just their anniversary but also the day his first love divorced... *** 3 years after divorce, Some say his housewife ex-wife is the most famous doctor in the world, but he refuses to believe it. "God. Finally, huh?" His ex-Luna wife finally answers the phone. "Are you looking for Mommy?" a little girl on the other end said.

Olivia attended a wedding. The groom was her childhood best friend who she hadn't seen in years. The wedding stopped when he confessed he was in love with someone else. Worse still, he walked to Olivia and put his hands on her belly, "It's okay, honey. I will take care of you and our baby. " Olivia: WTH? What baby? ___ Back to pack, Olivia attends her long-lost friend's wedding, only to be stunned when he declares his love for someone else—her. And he insists they have a baby together. But Olivia is left questioning everything. In this gripping tale of love and betrayal, Olivia must uncover the truth amidst a web of secrets. Discover the unexpected twists that will change Olivia's life forever in this captivating story of love, friendship, and the baby she never saw coming ……

"So you only need a child from me?" My voice was impressively strong despite the pain I felt within. "No, Ella. I only need you to pretend to be my Luna, till my lover wakes up." "If I accept to do this, what do I stand to gain?" "You will be treated with utmost respect as the Luna and you will have access to everything you want," Ryker said and my already shattered heart froze. "This contract will be terminated immediately upon pregnancy and no money would be paid to you." ****** Ella Rose is an orphan who is constantly being maltreated by her stepmother and step sister. Everyone in the village considers her a plague and badluck. Without a mate and a good job, Ella becomes an object of ridicule. But everything changes when she runs into rogues in the forest. In an attempt to save herself, fate sends her falling into the hands of her mate. Things finally seem to turn around for the better when the mate in question turns out to be the feared and ruthless Alpha Ryker of the Black Fur Pack. He buys her from her wicked step family and Ella is floating with excitement until he tells her everything was a sham and he only got her to be his contract bride in a condition that she never gets pregnant. This seems like a simple rule despite the pain in her heart. She accepts to be is pretend Luna but what happens when she breaks the very clause she was supposed to keep? In this tale of romance and heartache, follow Ella as she surfs through a complicated life with a mate who already loves another and a pregnancy he is not supposed to know about...

Alec - My life has been nothing but pain. I gave up not just looking for my mate but in general a long time ago. My pack, my friends, not even my children can bring me out of this endless nightmare. My wolf runs things. But when I see Crista's face, I see an end to my misery. I'll stay silent no more. She is the light, and I'll do anything to protect her. Crista - One night of terror has sent my peaceful life into turmoil. My pack is gone, and so are my parents. I was only able to save my little sisters. But when we're found unknowingly crossing the border into the Incubi Pack, it feels more like out of the frying pan and into the fire. The alpha of the Incubi Pack is known across the world as ruthless. The Moon Goddess must have a sense of humor as my wolf whimpers mate' as his yellow eyes meet mine. This book is a spinoff series from the Bloodmoon Series. Characters and events in this book may overlap with Beta's Surprise Mate. The Incubi Pack Series: Book 1 - Alpha of Nightmares Book 2 - The Hybrid Alpha Book 3 - Dream Mate Anthology Short Story - Chosen Mate Anthology Bonus Story - Sicilian Holiday Anthology Short Story - The Quiet Giant's Mate Book 4 - Beta's Innocent Mate

His father disappeared; his brother committed suicide. Thomas Mayo, the God of War, returned, and he swore that he would take revenge…

“Prey, tell what happens when… if you lose? What benefits am I to reap from this bet of yours?” This bastard had a lot of nerve.I could not back down from him. I knew I could see this contest through. I know I can make my dream a reality.“If I lost than…I will serve under your modeling agency for free for half a year. Does that seem fair enough?” I said regaining my confidence. I could not help but glared back at Elijah. “Sounds like a fair trade to me, little kitten.” He said. I do not like that nickname. No matter how sexy it sounded on his lips.“If I lose than I will publicly apologize to you, I.” Elijah said with a smile repeating the terms. “But it you lose than you work as a model in my business for free for half of the year. Sound about right?” Elijah said.I shook his hand. “Deal.”Elijah smiled to the point where his teeth reminded me of the big bad wolf. “Deal,” he said softly.

Alex Crop is a young Billionaire, a very successful company CEO. He have been rated as the wealthiest man, #1Billionaira in the whole world for the past ten years and it seems like no one else is going to take that from him as his money kept on growing. Everyone sees him like a small god,he's got the breathe taking face, he got the money, the frame, lovers and haters, This Young Billionaire is struggling to lay his hands on something, Even though he's rich, he's still trying to achieve something. He can lay his hands on anything but he couldn't lay his hand on LOVE. Love wasn't his calling.. He lost faith in love.. But what happened when his younger sister came up with a plan. What plan?

Hell is empty and the all devils are here.. The darkness that surrounds us cannot hurt us,its the darkness in own heart we should fear.They say only bad people go to hell,but what happens when the good ones desperately seeks the kingdom of hell? A quest to find one thing. The only thing that can restores balance to the upside world of Kerik Renfred. After watching her only reason and motivation for living well, sadly sink down like a stone. Kerik must finally chose to either drown in her misery, or fight and take back what is rightfully hers.

“You want one hundred thousand dollars for your body, fine. Produce me an heir within six months and the money is yours when the baby is born.” The coldness in his voice sends a shiver up my spine. “Are you serious?”“Yes.”“B-but what about the other part of my request?” I stammer out.“What other part?” he asks with his eyebrow raised.I clutch the contract close to my chest. “The part where I get to leave. If I have your baby, Ansel, can I take the money and walk away?”When I was bought at an auction by my ex-boyfriend whom I hadn’t seen for many years, he signed a contract with me, as long as I gave birth to him a child, I could get the money and leave. but after I gave birth, he regretted it.

Shana‘s world turned up side down when she realized she was wolfless. However, when Shana got bullied as the wolfless transfer student in a new school, the hot hockey captain suddenly ran to her and lifted her in his arms. ____________ "You were there for me when I needed you. Now, it's my turn to be there for you." Blinking in astonishment, I found myself staring into the familiar face of Bear— the chubby-cheeked, infectious-smiled, and brilliantly blue-eyed best friend I had thought I had lost.