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EMPEROR RICHARD'S POV I felt an intruder in my study as I wanted to enter and frowned. It has been years since anyone dared to mess around with me. I wonder which idiot doesn't fear death. Who dares to snoop around in my study? I slowly opened the door, sharpening my ear for any sounds. Someone suddenly jumped at me. I wanted to paralyze the person in anger when the familiar fragrance hit my nostrils, making me pull my lethal energy back in horror. I immediately stared at the lovely mass of flesh in my arms, smiling shyly at me. "What the fuck are you doing here?" I roared at my wife, my heart beating wildly. The smile and shy eagerness on her face immediately wiped away, replaced by pain. Her shining eyes dimmed in fear. "I'm so sorry. I will leave right away. I just missed you, so I decided to find you. But you were busy. When I noticed you coming to the study, I rushed in here to wait for you. I acted stupidly and impulsively. I'm so sorry" she whispered in remorse. "Wh
RONA'S POV I sat on my bed and breathed a sigh of relief. That was so close. Thank goodness he was unsuspecting. He bought my cock and bull story of missing him. Miss him my ass! Miss an idiot who I'm making meticulous efforts to kill? What a joke! I just have to be more careful. My tears and the wife status, peppered with a little lie might not work next time. So I need to be more careful, he also seemed suspicious of me. But thank goodness he still considered the wife bond, otherwise I would have been in the dungeons cooling off by now. He seems to have an attachment already, there was remorse in his eyes when he saw my tears. Now, I can work with this. If I can wrap him around my fingers, killing him will be a cake walk. I heard the door open and Annalise walked in. "Where have you been? I came back and couldn't find you!" She said accusingly. I smiled warmly at her. "I went to cause some mischief, " I whispered with a smile. "This is no place for mischief. This is
RONA'S POV I screamed in fear and began to run as fast as my legs could carry me. The huge dragon bared its teeth at me, lazily and leisurely coming after me as if it was sure there was no escape route for me. Its slow steps as it slowly gained ground on me made me feel threatened and regretful. It lazily followed me around while I ran with all my might, as if it was enjoying my meaningless struggle. Damn dragons! Damn Richard for keeping such a dangerous thing below the palace grounds! Damn me for being too desperate to dig out dirt and secrets, in my bid to pull Richard down! Tears ran down my cheeks as I ran desperately, calling on the goddess to save me from the dragon who seemed to be grinning at me. It was enjoying my fear. I have a feeling that my desperate attempt at running was turning the monster on and making it giddy. If it thought I'm an easy lunch, it should rethink. I ran into a nearby cave, hoping the mouth would be too big for the enormous dragon. I sig
I looked up at her in fear as she moved closer to me, taking slow deliberate steps. "You are a witch with bad intentions, aren't you? You have been here just for a day, but you're already snooping around in such a precious garden, despite being told it was out of bounds. You sneaked in even though you were initially blocked by guards. Alpha princess Erica, what's your mission in this castle?" She roared furiously, a triumphant smile playing around her lips as she tried to feign the righteous niece protecting her uncle. I always knew Olivia hated me at first sight, but I didn't expect she would go to the extent of using guards to trap me and cut off my escape path. "What's your mission here? You're here to steal secrets for spies, right? Who sent you? Was it your ambitious father? Or your greedy brother? Or was it your sly little brain urging yourself on? You want to be Imperial Luna and rule the wolfdom and its vast lands? Keep dreaming! You will not smell anywhere near that seat
RONA'S POV I watched one of her girls approach me with a spiked stick, wearing an ugly expression. "If I survive this, just know you have signed your death warrant. I hope the satisfaction you will gain from groveling before your mistress will be worth it then" I threatened in a low voice, meeting her vicious glare with my reproachful gaze. I saw her face freeze in fear and hesitation as she raised the stick. "Oh! Don't worry about that, she's never gonna survive this. She's definitely dying today. I wonder if the emperor will even notice she's dead already" Olivia said, cackling loudly. She obviously heard the threat which I issued to her lackey. Her assurances seem to add some backbone to her dog, making her harden her face. I looked at her with disdain as the first stroke landed on my thighs. I bit my lips and gritted my teeth through the pain, as my silk gown tore. The maid licked her lips in glee, obviously enjoying the chore. She hit me again with all her strength. Th
EMPEROR RICHARD'S POV I sighed impatiently and looked at him. "Just save her life. You can ask for any herb. Even if it's Immortal herbs, I will definitely provide it. I will also pay you handsomely. Employ all your expertise. I will reward you richly, "I urged, trying my best not to shout. He shook his head and looked at me. "You don't understand what I'm talking about. Of course, I know there's no herb in the universe which you don't have in stock, no matter how rare. I'm your servant, so payment can never be an issue, serving you is something I always do with pleasure and dedication" he said calmly, looking up at me. "Then what's the problem?" I whispered, fearing the worst. "She's almost dead! It's already miraculous that she's still breathing. Whoever the monster that did this to the princess is, they are inhumane and never intended for her to make it out alive, especially since she doesn't have her wolf. Each strike was lethal and brutal!" He continued, clenching his
EMPEROR RICHARD'S POV I watched Annalise carry away the water used to clean Erica up to the bathroom, my heart heavy with guilt. It has been three days, yet she has not regained consciousness despite the doctor's relentless efforts and the hundreds of rare Immortal herbs I kept forking out to resuscitate her. If only she had her wolf, I would have used my beast blood to help her. It has been three damned days since then, three days of worries and endless pain. Three days of frustration and fear. Three days of trying not to lose hope. Three days of hating myself over and over again. The money I have lost on herbs this few days will be enough to fund an entire battalion of soldiers for five years. However, the cost was the least of my problems right now, I just want her to live. I sighed heavily, feeling as if I was carrying the whole world on my shoulders, I might as well be. Her neck, waist and legs were all in special casts. She has survived these few days by feeding on e
EMPEROR RICHARD'S POV I woke up to someone rapping softly at the door. "Come in" I whispered, forcing my tired eyes open. Annalise and the doctors walked in. They always stay in the opposite room, where Annalise temporarily stays, till I get enough time with Erica. They entered and I noticed someone staring at me with hatred. Even though it didn't feel as threatening as a murderous intent, it still made me very uncomfortable. I turned and saw Annalise glaring daggers at me with so much hatred on her face. She immediately looked away once she realized that I had caught her. I sighed and looked away. Even though she had been trying to hide the hatred in her after what happened, I can't stop feeling it. I have an innate ability to sense when someone around was trying to hurt me. I would have had Annalise executed if I didn't know why she detested me so much. I decided to overlook it and pretend I don't know she's cursing me in her mind. "Your majesty, you have lots of en
RONA'S POVI only kept grunting in pain, covered in sweat and blood. ‘Ara, why are you doing this?’ I asked for the umpteenth time, unable to wrap my head around the reason my wolf wants to kill me. I suddenly felt the cold energy from last night push to the front of my mind, giving me hope. But before I could get relief from the mind numbing pain, I felt Ara's hot flames push the cold energy back, intensifying her efforts to burn me up. “This won't do, I just felt Lord Liam's aura. Hurry and get the pendant you took from me. It's an ice attribute treasure, it can chain Ara down for a while. Stand, stand now.” I heard a voice in my head telling me in a desperate voice. For a fleeting moment I felt confused, wondering if I was going crazy from the pain. Why am I hearing that strange voice in my head again? And why does that soft, feminine voice seem familiar?“Aish! Rona, this is not the time for this. I said move, now! Even if you want to die, I don't. Get the ice jade pendant!” Th
A scream tore off my lips before I could control my vocal cords properly. Cold sweat covered my body and I could feel my hand changing to claws, in addition to furs appearing on my flawless skin. I gritted my teeth and bit my tongue hard, trying to endure the pain. I screamed out as blood began to trickle out of my nose and ears. ‘Ara, what are you doing? Please don't do this, Liam has not gone far, what if he detects my aura? Even if you manage to take over my consciousness, you will also end up dead before you know it. Your aura will be prominent, your eye color and every other thing will show that I'm no longer the one in control. The moment I die, you also die. What in hell’s name are you thinking, Ara?’I scolded mentally, groaning as more veins split open in my body. However, Ara pretended not to hear me, intensifying her efforts to eat away at my consciousness. I screamed out in pain and vomited blood, my eyes bulging painfully. Tears and blood streamed down my eyes as I envis
RONA'S POV Liam always had a reputation of being cold. Richard and his three closest aides were always known for their coldness, arrogance, dominance and strength. However, his temperament was the coldest of them all. He's an introverted warrior and I have never seen him smile, no one has. "It's Lord Liam Davis to you, not Liam!" He said coldly, looking up at me. "And why do I need to address you by that title?" I asked with a calm smile, going to sit before the zither. I began to play it while waiting for his answer. "I'm Lord Liam Davis of the northern fortress, alpha king of blue moon territories and the commander of the emperor's heaven's mandate armies. Address me properly and don't embarrass yourself." He said haughtily, in that characteristically cold way of his. I smiled again and stopped playing the zither, maintaining my smile. "I'm the emperor's woman. You serve my husband, so why do I need to be servile before you?" I asked coldly, watching him clench his fist and s
RONA'S POV It has been one week since Richard went to the war front, yet there was no news of his return or impending victory. I have tried reaching out to the gamma in charge of internal affairs of the empire and castle, Liam Davis, to no avail. Am I worried about him? Nah! Impossible! It can't be! But I need to act like a caring and devoted wife now, shouldn't I? I walked downstairs and three guards immediately followed me, to my surprise. "What's wrong?" I asked, turning to them. "The emperor ordered that we escort and protect you wherever you go," one of them quickly explained. I frowned and nodded. He was probably worried that his niece would try to attack me again. I sighed and turned towards the entrance. "I heard you were asking about the palace that belongs to gamma Liam Davis." The first guard said again. "That's right, I went to the administrative quarters but I didn't find him" I quickly answered. "There's a palanquin waiting outside. Your retinue will carry you t
RONA'S POV I heard Richard's words when he came to visit me, however I kept feigning unconsciousness. I pretended to be asleep while listening to the voices of people around me. "There seem to be lots of attacks happening nowadays. The emperor is often at the war front. He always defeats them but more keep sprouting. Being powerful is not an easy task, people that are after what you have will risk their lives, braving the consequences just to get a shot at power. No wonder the emperor became so ruthless. Lots of his subordinates and subjects have tried to betray him in the past, stabbing him viciously in the back. If not for his unfathomable powers, he would have probably died a long time ago. So when he passes judgment cruelly, or acts viciously, I don't raise an eyebrow. He has been betrayed in the cruelest and most heartless ways possible in the past, making him unable to trust anyone. He will rather kill ten innocent people than let one traitor go unpunished." I heard a junior d
EMPEROR RICHARD'S POV "You don't mean that, do you?" Olivia whispered. "I do. The last time you hurt her, I spent rare Immortal herbs to save my wife's life. And even till now, she has not fully recovered. If those herbs were sold, the proceeds would be enough to build two castles, but I was forced to spend it on health care. Each time you meet her, you cause her pain and sadness. This is her home, no one is allowed to hurt her, not even you. She's my wife, she's a special woman, even if she hides her gifts. When a woman is married, she becomes happier. I also want that for my wife. And anyone that tries to make me a widower while I just got married will never be forgiven. Now leave and be a good girl." I whispered, rubbing Olivia's hair gently. She hissed and shook off my hand, stomping away from the palace. I rushed to Erica and knelt beside her. "Baby girl!" I whispered in fear, noticing the tears staining her unconscious face. I quickly carried her up and began to run up the s
EMPEROR RICHARD'S POV I quickly dragged her back, barely holding back my anger. "Are you crazy? What the hell do you think you are doing? Why are you hitting her? What did she do?" I growled, trying my best to rein in my anger. "She disrespected me!" Olivia roared back, her eyes blazing with fury. She was matching my stare fearlessly, making me wonder if she was really my seventeen year-old little girl. I clenched my fists and took a deep breath. "How did she disrespect you?" I asked calmly. "Imagine this wolfless, ugly, weak, disgusting, little usurper. This whore and gold digger, this bastard child of the alpha king, this lowly animal, she walked past me without greeting me. When I ordered her to get down on her knees and greet me, she refused to do it. How dare she? She is an eyesore. She needs to die!" She shouted. "It's not true. We didn't see you! You suddenly bumped into us at that corner, you ordered her to get down on her knees. She just frowned at hearing your words a
EMPEROR RICHARD'S POV I sighed as I stood up from my office chair. I work all day long yet there's always more work to do. If not for the fact that I am Immortal, I would have broken down a long time ago, because my body won't be able to carry the stress. From judging an annoying case between bitter ex-lovers immediately after breakfast, to getting buried neck deep in piles of documents and other annoying work. Some of the accounts were messed up and I realized that some lion-hearted ones have begun to pilfer from me, hoping that I won't notice since my income per week was massive. They also know I get very busy, so I guess they won't expect that I will calmly go through the books. They were hoping I would skim through it and fail to notice their actions. Impossible! I have a photographic memory, seeing something just once, even at a passing glance, is enough for me to remember it clearly. And now, I have to go on the inspections. I needed to check both the farms, the clothing
EMPEROR RICHARD'S POV I quickly stopped and pulled out. I touched my co*k and realized that it was coated with a mixture of fluids, including blood. I stared at it in confusion. Why was she bleeding because I went a little rough on her? She's no longer a virgin for godess's sake. "Baby girl, did I hurt you?" I whispered, bending down to kiss her neck. She shook her head and smiled. "It's nothing" "Is it very painful?" I asked again, fondling her pu**y. She shook her head with a smile, making me feel relieved. I kissed her and slipped it back in, telling myself to be very careful while thrusting, to avoid causing her pain. I continued kissing her while fondling her bo*bs and thrusting, till I felt her approaching release. She threw her legs around my waist as she began to spasm. I focused on her face watching her expression of bliss as she climaxed. She grabbed my arms, her nails grazing me slightly as she bit her lips to hold back a moan while her sweet juices trickled out o